I’m currently struggling with getting my query letter ready. I was wondering if you’d be willing to give me a few pointers on my description of the story?
It’s supposed to be short and compelling so I’ve decided to tell the story from one POV only, and instead mention that I have several at the end. What do you think?
A PROMISE OF VIOLENCE:
For the first time in eight months, Allie kicked aside the throw-rug, revealing the closed hatch. She grabbed the lever with both hands and dragged. The floorboards groaned as the trap door opened, revealing a doorway to the darkness below London. A network of short-cuts that few knew about and even fewer could navigate. She took a deep breath and braced for the journey.
Allie Jones is a Walker, a human with Fae blood running through their veins who can open shortcuts in reality. On orders from her father, King of the half-breeds, she shadows Charlie Mains, who at first seems nothing more than a laid-off programmer from Westham. But tailing Charlie uncovers more than her father bargained for, and soon, Allie is caught up in a plot to overthrow the queen of all Fae, and change the world forever.
A Promise of Violence is a 92000 word urban fantasy novel about choices, growing up and sacrifice. Available upon request.